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This future is wrong... by HazuraSinner This future is wrong... by HazuraSinner
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Twilight Sparkle's design for the "what if" story where she travels into an alternative and dark future.
A little warning. This concept involves my favorite pairings: Rainbow x Fluttershy, Pinkie x Twilight and Applejack x Rarity. Thou have been warned!

Here's the usual summary, however this one is about what happens to Twilight as the story unfolds, aaand is a little big:

After overcoming the shock of seeing Pinkie Pie's scarred figure, Twilight asked her what happened. Pinkie explained to her once long lost lover that she mysteriously disappeared fifteen years ago without a trace, and that during her absence Equestria fell into the Changelings hands. As heard the explanation Twilight started to realize what happened to her. She had been sent into the future, along with Star Swirl's book which lead her there.
The Princess's mind was full of questions but the first thing she could think of asking was where their friends were. Pinkie, saddened, told that they have been apart since an incident which occurred six years ago and that involved Spike. Pinkie takes Twilight in disguise to a cemetery on the outskirts of town and there they find a tombstone with Spike's name on it.
Twilight, devastated and unbelieving what her eyes saw, she opened Star Swirl's book of spells and desperately searched for the page that brought her there. As she found the said page she tried to concentrate her magic to open the portal but without effect. She was stuck there in that dreadful future.
Twilight trembled with both sadness and revolt, and then her eyes trailed into the distance, catching sight of Canterlot's castle, now destroyed by the Changelings but still standing tall. The Princess turned to Pinkie Pie with a determined look in her eyes and said they were going to regain the kingdom back from Chrysalis. And they were going to defeat her together with their friends. That was Twilight's only hope to make things right.
Their first stop was at the former Sugarcube Corner, where the Apple siblings now live. There they met Applejack, who was surprised to see Twilight after such a long time. Twilight explained what happened to her and requests for Applejack's help. The latter accepted without second thoughts but when the Princess said they'd need Rainbow Dash too she got reluctant about that. Applejack was confused why Twilight would even consider her after what happened to Spike, but the princess responded that it mustn't have been her fault, she would never lead her friends to their death.
After that the three girls headed to Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash's cottage, only to discover that Rainbow has been living on her own and that Fluttershy disappeared six years ago. Rainbow explained to them that she must've left because she blamed her for losing her sight. Applejack, shocked to hear what happened between them, turned unexpectedly to Rainbow and assured her that Fluttershy wouldn't leave her for something like that.
With Twilight's help the two girls talked things out and gaining back their lost friendship.
Now with Rainbow Dash on board, the team's next step was to reach Hayseed Swamps, where Rarity lived according to Applejack. Twilight suggested that their fastest way there was through the Everfree Forest, and even when her friends warned about how more dangerous it became the Princess didn't show any fear, only assuring that she would protect them at any cost.
As they traversed the forest they were attacked by a stranger who turned out to be none other than Fluttershy, and when the blind girl realized she almost killed her friends she panicked and apologized countless times. After that Rainbow Dash decided to talk with her to resolve their issues, and in the end they re-conciliated and got back together. Twilight was more than overjoyed to see their friends happily together again, and that gave her hope for a better future once they've defeated the Changeling Queen.
Now the main five headed to their final destination in order to find Rarity. As they arrived to the said refugee camp they notice it's not small at all, and to find their friend they would have to split up.
Applejack was the one who found her, and when Twilight and the others reunited with them she thought Rarity would want to join them but she was determined to not go. Furthermore, she begged them to not go either, she didn't want to lose anyone else.
Twilight comprehended her fears, after knowing what her friends have been through it was understandable, and she didn't want to force Rarity to join them. Instead, Twilight just explained why neither she or the others wanted to give up. They didn't want to live under the shadow of Chrysalis anymore, nor allow her to take everything they held dear. Twilight was determined to bring back the once prosperous kingdom of Equestria, for all those who've suffered and gave their lives in the war, for Spike.
When the main five left the camp they were surprised to see Rarity running after them with a few bags full of supplies. She had changed her mind. Apparently Twilight's words have reached her will to stand up and fight for her beliefs.
Now that the team was back together they still had one final challenge ahead of them and it lied on Canterlot's Castle. The night approached fast as the main six got closer to the mountain where the castle stood, and when Twilight recalled that they've been walking miles all day she decided it was best to rest before the final battle.
The six girls talked for a while, reminding the good old days and new plans they had to help rebuild the kingdom. And when they started to get tired they fell asleep one after another with exception of Twilight. She didn't feel like sleeping. Instead she thought on all the horrible things she saw and heard all day. She thought on how her absence made their whole world turn upside down.
As the sleep finally caught up with her, she glanced at each one of her friends and lover, all holding hands and sleeping close to each other, and before falling asleep she promised that wouldn't abandon them ever again.


Ok, I lied. This isn't the last piece of the set. Spike the Dragon will have his own piece too, he deserves it as much as the girls. Probably more.

Twilight Sparkle (My Little Pony) fyre-flye, Hasbro
Human concept me

On my Tumblr page: hazurasinner.tumblr.com/post/7…
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:iconnvn50:
nvn50 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2016
where can i find this story???
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:iconhazurasinner:
HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2016  Professional
You can find it in my MLP art folder, it's the only story I have written here.
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spunkey23 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2016
Can you make one on sunset shimmer
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2016  Professional
Sunset Shimmer doesn't appear in this story.
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crazyharrypotterfan1 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I loved this episdode but my BFF didn't understand it XD I LOOOOOOVE Nightmare Moon she so sweg :3
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2015  Professional
I'm afraid you're mistaken about this illustration. If you read the description attentively below it you'll realize that this piece was made way before the season 5 finale and isn't related to it in any way.
Although I have to admit I'm quite shocked with how much alike some scenes from the episodes were to this alternative future I came up with.
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Ashardu Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2016  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Could it be that some ideas came from the fans and we never noticed? Like, taking them as episode fuel and use them for their advantage?
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2016  Professional
I don't know.
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EcliptorCalrissian Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2015
After the season finale, this becomes pretty relevant.
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2015  Professional
It's quite shocking, I'm still shocked at how Sombra and Chrysalis's futures had quite some similarities to this alternative future I worked on.
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EcliptorCalrissian Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2016
They should be paying you...
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TameiusDiskaWolf Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
-.- Why the hell is this not a damn Comic yet! 
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2015  Professional
In case you don't know, comics take a long time to be done, they go through a large process before it reaches the final part which is the page you all can read in seconds. It's a hard work and lots of dedication which I can't provide for something with no gain in return. That's why this, and many other fanart works I've made, aren't comics.
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TameiusDiskaWolf Featured By Owner Dec 19, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
I know lol, but the storyline u did was super amazing you should really make that a kickstarter project loved the character similiarieties in their human forms!:P that was just amazing what you did their. I hope to see more of it! and its understandable that if u don't want to make it lol, I was just complimenting on what a wonderful job u did and that you should make other projects like! Gives you *10 Star Rating on the story!*
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2015  Professional
That'll never happen. Making kickstarters based on characters that aren't mine it's not in my right to make money out of it, even if it's a big company. It's a matter of respect because I wouldn't want the same towards me.
Anyways, thanks for the compliment on my work.
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TameiusDiskaWolf Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2015  Hobbyist Artist
No problem man^^ Keep up the good work! 
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Coolca48 Featured By Owner Edited Sep 22, 2015
This is amazing!

But this just reminds me of Ocarina of Time.
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2015  Professional
That's the first comparison to Legend of Zelda I heard of, although this was inspired by one of Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles 2003 episodes.
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Coolca48 Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2015
Never seen Ninja Turtles. And especially not 2003 episodes. I just thought since Time travel and destroyed home = Ocarina of Time. Or similar, anyway
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Spartan0205 Featured By Owner Edited Sep 15, 2015
Why doesn't rainbow just get a robot arm like how aj got her leg
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2015  Professional
Applejack's leg is a simple prosthetic leg without any robotic functions, and since Rainbow's arm was cut over the elbow to have a prosthetic arm like Applejack's leg it would only interfere with her fast combat moves. And not to mention that Rainbow cut contact with the village since she lost her arm so no one would build one for her even if she wanted.
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disneymickeygirl459 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
It's awesome! But, is anyone thinking of Same As It Never Was right now?
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Yumarcs Featured By Owner May 4, 2015  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm gonna cry....This is too good for anything...I'm smiling and crying at the same time :) :(
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Ow. My Feels.Really Sad  
The lack of change on Twilight, along with her expression, really hammers home how much has changed in this world. I probably would've been more impactful in a group shot; but that's nitpicking.
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CrystalGreene Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2015  Professional Digital Artist
GREAT hair on all your artwork. love it.
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JMK-Prime Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2015  Student General Artist
Scary.
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Spartan0205 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2015
Please end with HAPPY ending, I don't wanna cry anymore.
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:iconhazurasinner:
HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2015  Professional
It will have a happy ending, I assure you of that. Sorry that it made you sad! D8
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Davinci975 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014
is this a fan fic
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:iconhazurasinner:
HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014  Professional
Supposedly, but I'm still having doubts if I should finish writing it.
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BronyPonyMan Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2014
i'd say finish it. it would be a crime to not finish such an amazing story!

have you ever thought of putting up in the fimfiction website? your writing is amazing, and i feel that it would be crazy popular on there!  
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2014  Professional
The first chapter of the story is already uploaded here, hazurasinner.deviantart.com/ar… . The majority of the fans demanded the story, and even though I'm not the best writer around I decided to make the story public instead of locking it up. I just hope it's not a disappointment, for some reason I draw more than I write. 'XD
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BronyPonyMan Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2014
well, they do say that a pictures worth a thousand words, so you are a fantastic writer, it's just that your 'written word' is more colorful and appealing to the eye. and i did read the story, i was just thinking that if you put it on a site dedicated to stories about mlp, it might garner even more attention. not to mention that it could draw even more fans to your page on deviantart.com if you link your pictures to the story as it goes along.

just food for thought.
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2014  Professional
Thank you very much, it means a lot to hear such positive feedback on my works.
I have considered that but since I don't make much intention of writing other stories, I'm far too lazy for that unfortunately, I don't think it's worth to make an account on that site just for this story. :/
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BronyPonyMan Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2014
that's to bad. welp, always know that if you do decide to do it, i'll definitely read it! 
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Davinci975 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014
you have a good story base
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014  Professional
Thank you very much.
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Davinci975 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2014
your welcome
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The-Fidget Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this
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somercet Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2014
:( Man, that face.
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doubletroubledemon Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2014  Student General Artist
good job la in love 
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ColonelBSacquet Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014
Couldn't she use "reverse gears" on that time-travelling formula ?
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:iconhazurasinner:
HazuraSinner Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Professional
Unfortunately the spell doesn't work in reverse, Twilight tries to use it but it fails.
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ColonelBSacquet Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014
So, basically, she has to create her own time travelling spell in order to go back in time, so everything that has been done is undone ? Great, painstaking task, it sure is.
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ImperfectXIII Featured By Owner May 21, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You know, I'm not all that into dark stuff when it comes to My Little Pony (to this day, I've still never read Fallout: Equestria), but this is still one of the coolest concepts I've ever heard. I can't wait to read the complete story when it's done! :D
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Professional
Well, rest assured that you're not the only one, I'm not a fan of dark themed stories too. Especially with a cute show like My Little Pony. But this idea was so interesting, even if too dark, that I had to make it happen. Thank you, even if it's not your type of story I'm glad that you like what I did with the concepts so far. =)
I just hope to not disappoint with the story, I'm not a decent writer as I am an artist but I'm trying to not make it confusing. XD
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zhen-kun Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Student Artist
Twi looks awesome in this :D
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SongBird567 Featured By Owner May 16, 2014
Is there an actual story somewhere and if not could you tell me which of these I should read in order  
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HazuraSinner Featured By Owner May 17, 2014  Professional
Well the story isn't out, I'm still working on it and will try finish it. As for the order of these pieces, first is Pinkie's, then Applejack, Rainbow, Fluttershy and finally Rarity. Twilight's contain a summary of the main events in the story while the others contain their past so it should be read last, but it's ok if you didn't read for this order.
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SongBird567 Featured By Owner May 17, 2014
Thank you. I have been reading them andthey're really good. 
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